Saturday, January 13, 2007

the warmth is gone

the warmth is gone,
chased away by the rain
and wind-
writing at midnight
with swollen and stiff knuckles

1 Comments:

Blogger Alan Summers said...

I really like this!

I wonder if lines 4 & 5 could be something like:

I write at midnight
with swollen stiff knuckles



To increase the immediacy even more?

It's a lovely dynamic poem, I only wish you didn't suffer for your art! ;-)

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